07-19-2015, 01:17 AM
Quite like your piece; it reads as if it is a found poem, "written on the hoof" so to speak.
Think the first two stanzas are the best as it gets a bit rambling and dear diary after that.
Perhaps you could cut out a few references to yourself too.
Obi.
Think the first two stanzas are the best as it gets a bit rambling and dear diary after that.
Perhaps you could cut out a few references to yourself too.
Obi.