Emergency Bacon

[cidermaid]

    Love it.   Also think this has a sing song / nursery rhyme feel to it.  I get the control of the structure but I found on reading it aloud that it felt like it wanted to to hang differently.
Heres what my read gave me.  (sorry I've messed up you nice tidy poem but I find that bacon just cannot stay all neat and straight it needs to go all squiggly).

(Oh an no you're not an idiot - Perfectly normal, you never know when you might need some bacon in your life )

Author's Note: Yes, yes, I'm an idiot.


Emergency Bacon

I keep a shard of bacon
in my hat,
hard as arteries.

In my shoe,
under the tongue,
there's bacon,
underdone.  Thought both first two stanzas perfect.  No suggestes, please don't change.  Started smiling as soon as I read these.  (sort of paddington bear thing going on - very loveable)


I keep my party bacon   (Love the shift to a party animal with suitable attire of party bacon)
in a black, and secret larder
on my hip

for when someone   Least favorite line -  reads heavy and clunky.
asks, achingly,                                                                                                                                                                                                  why suddenly                                                                                                                                                                                                               they're craving bacon.  sorry it had to be moved up - I want a bit of bacon in each stanza !!

Want a snack?
I'd gladly barter
a little bacon,
for a hug.

Distressed,
they eat my bacon
in the name of love.  Brilliant ending.     what can i say - now I want some bacon.

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