Patriotic Colors

[tectak]

I like the general message of the poem and its stance of the subject of war.
No one should have to die for what they believe and the notion that people cannot be civil is a saddening one. People within society tend to accept great suffering because great suffering is so common in the world. And when atrocities become so widespread, people tend to accept it as a vanilla facet of life.
While we can't exactly make a paradise on Earth, we can most certainly make this planet a much better place for all its creatures. Whether people will wake up and dare to experience change is the defining factor. With all this being said, I do think the poem could stand to use more imagery to better convey the message and as Fluorescent.43 has stated, the general fine tuning of the words in the piece will help greatly. Balance is key in all things. A poem isn't created. It's sculpted, perfected. Anyway, I do hope this helps. ^_^

This critique may or may not help. It rather depends upon WHAT you hope to help. As a discussion of content you may be better suited to the Discussion forum. In this forum you should try to suggest areas of improvement...that is the primary directive. Mod