06-29-2015, 08:04 AM
I like the tone and theme of this poem, however I don't really think the enjambment complements the poem, instead I think it subtracts from the feel of the poem. The enjambment to me add these small pauses instead of flowing freely. These small breaks seem a tad jarring, because the poem is all about being confident about yourself and happy with how and what we are, but these little pauses seem like hesitations, the mark of low confidence. Now that could be a brilliant juxtaposition of how people want to seem but how we end up feeling anyway, so if that's intended then hats off to you.
The reason i think the enjambment leads to these little 'pauses' is because the lines are so small (1st, 3rd and 4th stanza).
But like I said, i think the poem is good and I really like the tone and feel its just personally i feel the structure could use a little more work, but hey, some people have already said they like the enjambment so it might be down to personal preference
The reason i think the enjambment leads to these little 'pauses' is because the lines are so small (1st, 3rd and 4th stanza).
But like I said, i think the poem is good and I really like the tone and feel its just personally i feel the structure could use a little more work, but hey, some people have already said they like the enjambment so it might be down to personal preference