monostitch

[tectak]

Lay Down Your Arms
The stubborn heroin will never surrender

Hi mark,
Let's just stick with Monostich...after all, credit is best applied where due

OK, so true to form, title is of significance if you want to be punny funny  but for the cleverness to work you need to make the whole thing so obvious that the reader thinks " Hey, that's neat...why didn't I think of that".
Here, we have what may or may not be  a competant play on words...one cannot be sure that the writer means what is said and in that sense something is lost.( Hell, it could even be monostick...huh?) Even the heroin/heroine play is suspect in context.(No offence, you know what you are doing...but do we believe you?)
It should not be that more is said about a Monostich than is written...but more should be within the words than is simplistically apparent.
The old chestnut ( by someone) "Bravery runs in our family" is more of a dichotomy born out of pairing the bravery with running (away) but would still be called a Monostich to give it the benefit of categorisation over and above the pun.
To elevate the form, and it may have  been a Grouchoism, the line with a condition followed by the pun works much better as in
" xxxxx runs in our family like wooden legs" just BECAUSE of the silliness; it has no pretensions of intellectual pontification.
So where is this going? Well, I think this misses the target because of the opening cliche. The unoriginality of the opener (yes, the title) makes familiarity the enemy. The arrow flies out of the bow but falters and falls weakly...no solid impact. Oh, we can all argue profundity but without consensus we are left unsure. Maybe that is good, maybe that is bad...see, no consensus even in crit
Best,
tectak