Aviary Awakening

[Merrikay]

justmercedes

Thanks! I wasn't really thinking when I wrote alights, that really doesn't make much sense, haha. I'll figure something else out. I'm not really sure if a tornado can have an apex, maybe another word would work better here. I'm glad you got what I was going for, and even more so, I hadn't thought out the connection between the bird and the wind that throughly, but now it has me thinking.. Thanks for the input!

Mark

Thanks for commenting! Youre right about red and soft, and as Mercedes said its weighing it down, I suppose. I see what you mean about accuracy, I'll pay more attention to that in my next revision. Thank you for the suggestions, that opened my mind to some new possibilities... I'm sure the next edit won't be perfect, haha, but I do think a personal best might be an achievable goal!