06-25-2015, 02:36 AM
My input maybe lousy, but you never know...
I felt the need to say a narwhal seems like a well enough known animal to me, that I immediately made the jump. "Pack ice" was what gave me a pause, I don't know how it was meant, but it feels like it was meant as packed ice? I'm not sure. I like it, and am just looking for something to critique to make it better, which in my shoes, is very difficult. Thanks
I felt the need to say a narwhal seems like a well enough known animal to me, that I immediately made the jump. "Pack ice" was what gave me a pause, I don't know how it was meant, but it feels like it was meant as packed ice? I'm not sure. I like it, and am just looking for something to critique to make it better, which in my shoes, is very difficult. Thanks
I relish writing bad poems, if it means someday I'll write a good one.