Look Where She Points

[QDeathstar]

Look Where She Points

A real woman has lived –
showing off
my experience in bed with
my stretchmarks and
I don't mind

celebrating sex with passion
and joy and not afraid to
disrobe to feed my child and
I don't mind

having
rough hands that have
diapered two bottoms and
I don’t mind

sharing my
laughter with crows feet and
I earned

every single silver hair and
I don't care to shave because
it's winter here nine months a year

Look at me, little ones –
with your new technology and
leggings for pants –
a real woman
is me – so see me –
I don't mind

this is such a great poem after the first stana. I'll admit I read the first stanza, rolled my eyes a bit, noticed the lack of punctuation, and got ready to press the reply button. But then, I noticed the I don't mind being repeated, and so I had to know why.

I read the whole thing and was drawn into it without the burden of the first stanza. I think maybe the first goes on for a bit too long, or feels long, with the line breakers and -- ... I also think that starting off with "A real woman as lived--" comes off a bit accusational... what women aren't real women?