06-19-2015, 01:45 AM
Paul,
I'm still thinking about this one, but just wanted to say that the change in the second line from 'I am crippling honesty' to 'a crippling confession' has changed the whole thing completely and it has created more of a possible connection between the two stanzas. So in that sense it is a good edit. Actually it's quite amazing how such a small alteration can affect the whole piece in such a big way.
Mark
I'm still thinking about this one, but just wanted to say that the change in the second line from 'I am crippling honesty' to 'a crippling confession' has changed the whole thing completely and it has created more of a possible connection between the two stanzas. So in that sense it is a good edit. Actually it's quite amazing how such a small alteration can affect the whole piece in such a big way.
Mark
wae aye man ye radgie