Aviary Awakening

[milo]

A Redbird departs earth,
Stirring a longing breeze on which
innocent feathers drift;
Like bees to a succulent orchid.

The hummingbird migrates
Leaving in its wake, a Phoenix
born from the ashes of naivety.

Alright, so first, I think you misspelled "Aviary" in your title.
Second - think about where you break a line.  Are you using these breaks to maximum effect or are you just measuring them like pieces of wood?  . . .which?
Third - abstractions - they are poetry killers.  There is no such thing as "ashes of naivety"
Finally, modification.  Try to avoid modification that is just making your writing flabby.  Every time you modify, think, is it making the overall poem stronger?  Is it pointing directly to my central metaphor?  Is it creating the inadvisable effect of hyperbole or over drama?  I am looking at you, "succulent".