Loathing Lichen (edit 1)

[FindingJune]

Hey, thanks for the read and recommendations June. You have some fine ideas. I like 'overflowing' as the Tao is often compared to a river. I am doing the same herein.

I agree on that first 'vigor,' as I am really referring to 'youth' and should just come out and say it.

I think that 'foliage' would sound better than 'vegetation.'

Yes, I am cutting off one of those 'leaks.'

Great critique and I will credit you in my next edit.    Cheers/Chris

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Edit 1 is posted, thanks again June and Mercedes!  

I'm glad I could be helpful. This really is a lovely piece.