Hollow.

[billy]

hi nyxx;

the first line feels like it need to be split, i see you're using quatrains so if split it would give a five line first stanza. i'd suggest

Now, a black hole:

Where once there was sun
I am empty-bellied,
Suffocating.
What’s left when you let go?

i enjoyed the read but felt you could cut back the wordage a little to give some weight to it.

Yay! First poem on the forum! I just finished this, looking forward to hearing what you guys think!
Hollow.
Where once there was sun—now, a black hole
I am empty-bellied, i like the emotion this line shows
Suffocating.
What’s left when you let go?

Without your breath,
I’m merely flesh.
Hollowing, dissolving— could this line be better said. something along the lines of [a drying husk] you have lots to choose from it would also help to get rid of two [ing] words
becoming dust.

And you know, I swear we were happy. is [and you know] needed?
I was enough.
At one point, when you looked at me,
It was love.

But darling, I don’t pray
And I certainly won’t start now.
Know I mean it when I say these last two line are strong and don't beat about the bush,
That I hope you die alone.