06-14-2015, 02:29 AM
DivineMsEmm
Thank you, you've given me some food for thought! In the second line, it was simply an ignorance of whether to use a comma/colon/period. I'm having problems trying to get away from the abstract and create solid imagery, it's a tad frustrating! Your questions really helped me to view it how a reader would
Poppoetry
I'm glad you like the subject! I can see how it'd be better if it made more of an impact, I'll work on it, thanks for your alteration, I would have never thought of forming it like that. I think I'll go read some more poetry and try to broaden my perspective.
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Thank you, you've given me some food for thought! In the second line, it was simply an ignorance of whether to use a comma/colon/period. I'm having problems trying to get away from the abstract and create solid imagery, it's a tad frustrating! Your questions really helped me to view it how a reader would
Poppoetry
I'm glad you like the subject! I can see how it'd be better if it made more of an impact, I'll work on it, thanks for your alteration, I would have never thought of forming it like that. I think I'll go read some more poetry and try to broaden my perspective.
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I relish writing bad poems, if it means someday I'll write a good one.