06-11-2015, 07:13 PM
this poem forces the reader to read it a few times to get what's going on which is a great start to any poem, I am a little confused about stanza 3 and think this could be left out, at stanza 4 they're smoking behind the school yet at stanza 3 the writer is catching up on work????, the poem reads like the subject is female and is being led astray by a male colleague/student, the structure is clever and interesting and a little more work on a rhyming scheme would really help this poem.
(06-07-2015, 12:16 AM)i.might.be.a.bit.sad Wrote: I didn't get offered
smokes. I guess people assumed
that I would
neverhurt my body in that way.
We got drunk and almost
fell off the bed.
We did other stuff too,
things I liked because I didn't
have
to think. A month later,
I was still making up work
from that week I missed. I
"had the flu". I was "fine"
I...
lied. We smoked during
fourth hour, in that alley
behind school. I never thought
I would want to remember...
Oops.

