06-09-2015, 06:05 PM
Paul,
Excellent observation from srijantje and all credit to you for going with it. Might I also add that you could lose all the punctuation the way that it is now whereas in the original I understand that because you had to use the comma after spring then naturally the whole piece needed punctuating. It's not a big thing, just a thought. Great piece.
You know that there may be some who will wonder about who June is and why she is jealous, but hopefully not on this site
Cheers for the read,
Mark
Excellent observation from srijantje and all credit to you for going with it. Might I also add that you could lose all the punctuation the way that it is now whereas in the original I understand that because you had to use the comma after spring then naturally the whole piece needed punctuating. It's not a big thing, just a thought. Great piece.
You know that there may be some who will wonder about who June is and why she is jealous, but hopefully not on this site
Cheers for the read,
Mark
wae aye man ye radgie