06-07-2015, 11:48 PM
Ahh, yes, the dreaded cliche - I get it - that's why I wanted some new eyes for these pieces.
I also had this critiqued by my local writing group yesterday, and got some specific advice on honing these pieces in - got more feedback from the story I told ABOUT the pieces, and how could I get that story into the entirety of the piece.
So I'll do some heavy work on these pieces - and I bet they'll be halfway rewritten.
If anybody has specific language or arrangement you think would work, that would help. If the piece really isn't saying anything at all, let me know that too.
Critique is helpful for me if it is specific.
Thank you!
I also had this critiqued by my local writing group yesterday, and got some specific advice on honing these pieces in - got more feedback from the story I told ABOUT the pieces, and how could I get that story into the entirety of the piece.
So I'll do some heavy work on these pieces - and I bet they'll be halfway rewritten.
If anybody has specific language or arrangement you think would work, that would help. If the piece really isn't saying anything at all, let me know that too.
Critique is helpful for me if it is specific.
Thank you!
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DivineMsEmm / aka Emily Vieweg
Blog
Poetry is a matter of life, not just a matter of language. ~~ Lucille Clifton
DivineMsEmm / aka Emily Vieweg
Blog
Poetry is a matter of life, not just a matter of language. ~~ Lucille Clifton