06-06-2015, 04:10 PM
(06-06-2015, 10:57 AM)Erthona Wrote: The Passionate Man*
How cruel it is to render
a passionate man impotent,
so that all he does is sit in his room
staring with dulled eyes.
Having lived life like a god, "a" god
only to have the god desert him; so "that" god
the energy that once coursed through his body
is now the heaviness of lead instead. "now" makes "instead" redundant. Comparison is off, here. Energy unfavourably compared to heaviness? Hmmm. E=½Mv²
He would weep in self-pity
except he knows the truth of it....or because he knows the truth of it?
Pity the once passionate man,
for he was blessed and now has fallen.
Hell in life is no different from hell in death,
except in life you are still expected to act…fine. Ahhh...commitment verse and I like it
Erthona
[b] Hi dale,
Trite for you. Point made but not quite taken. I think it is the conflict between the god early on and God later...though as a comment on the assumption of God when death approaches it probably stands. That, though, is my thinking, not yours.
Best,
was glad to see your back(old ones are best)
tetak
©2015
Note bene:
*I use man in the generic sense so that it represents both genders. It has been my experience that woman can be just as passionate and just as foolish as men.