The Textile Downtown

[billy]

it reads like a train of thought piece. love the use of milling on the first line, it connects to the textile industry, to gatherings and to corn husks. some of the enjambment feels forced [with-on, etc]
the 2nd stanze while having good sonics/flow left me a bit stumped. had to google Narragansett but it was worth it. as an ex mill worker i see what your trying to say in the last stanza but fabric
tacks is hard for me to fit in.

The Textile Downtown should it be down town or Downtown Textile?

I spent last night milling with
the midday gentrifiers
found myself floating on
waterfire gondolas
patrolling the bridges
hugging the meanders {is this saying [huging the bends?]}
guarding the towers
empty cornhusks
rising from the riparian does riparian need something more here; it reads as the river bank when it should mean of/on the riverbank. I do love the word choice

Such a treasure
a gotham in a snow globe
a hamlet sandwiched almost too clever
into a bay-tipped
quill-and-ink-run-dry
half century flown
by hey Buddy’s
running for mayor
I’m sure that will work out i like the enjambment here the pause adds another dimention
fine

I spent my pittance
on scrap
metal a hammer
for the waterwheel
turning
slowly
slowly nice [slowly's], that give an actual pace
the miller trapped and
drowning

I joined the late- not sure [-] is needed, i think the line separation works well enough
morning Narragansett
for brunch by the fabric
tracks across
the weaves
and looms
a click-clack the sound of these last three lines make the perfect noise
of something so
overcoming