05-15-2015, 10:40 PM
Please take this with a grain of salt, but is the last couplet necessary?
Either way, I love this work. I can see the kitchen in my mind. The kitchen I see is my grandmother's, but I am sure that your kitchen and mine are similar.
Either way, I love this work. I can see the kitchen in my mind. The kitchen I see is my grandmother's, but I am sure that your kitchen and mine are similar.

