05-03-2015, 10:42 PM
Todd,
Thank you for listening and commenting.
I'm glad you liked the "day by day, by day, by day,....." line as sung.
This repetition wasn't there in the original lyric as written: but was something that came spontaneously and something I FELT, as I sang this for the recording.
It just FELT right to me and so included it here.
Pleased you got the feeling too.
Not sure I can remove the "She tells me " from the next line as it is a new paragraph... a new verse... a new thought and I really wanted to break away from the train of thought of the line before, to say "She tells me that she's dying...".
As I've mentioned earlier, this song wasn't about a "real" death, although the person concerned was dying a little every day, metaphorically, and in great distress.
When I wrote this I felt the need to protect the identity of the person involved so chose the metaphor of Cancer and this song can therefore be read /heard very literally... as most readers / listeners do, naturally, and take away a very different understanding of the song. Which is fine by me as it was an intentional bit of "cloaking".
Not sure if that makes sense but "cloaking" of identities is something I have used a lot in my work.
I am also pleased you liked the lines
"She has no eyes, no tears to weep"
Her cancers run too deep-
She’s so tired, she cannot sleep
Thank you again for taking the time to listen and comment on this song.
-Psyve
Dale,
Thank you for your comment. As I have indicated in my response to Todd above, I intended to let this be understood in one of two ways.
-Psyve
Thank you for listening and commenting.
I'm glad you liked the "day by day, by day, by day,....." line as sung.
This repetition wasn't there in the original lyric as written: but was something that came spontaneously and something I FELT, as I sang this for the recording.
It just FELT right to me and so included it here.
Pleased you got the feeling too.
Not sure I can remove the "She tells me " from the next line as it is a new paragraph... a new verse... a new thought and I really wanted to break away from the train of thought of the line before, to say "She tells me that she's dying...".
As I've mentioned earlier, this song wasn't about a "real" death, although the person concerned was dying a little every day, metaphorically, and in great distress.
When I wrote this I felt the need to protect the identity of the person involved so chose the metaphor of Cancer and this song can therefore be read /heard very literally... as most readers / listeners do, naturally, and take away a very different understanding of the song. Which is fine by me as it was an intentional bit of "cloaking".
Not sure if that makes sense but "cloaking" of identities is something I have used a lot in my work.
I am also pleased you liked the lines
"She has no eyes, no tears to weep"
Her cancers run too deep-
She’s so tired, she cannot sleep
Thank you again for taking the time to listen and comment on this song.
-Psyve
Dale,
Thank you for your comment. As I have indicated in my response to Todd above, I intended to let this be understood in one of two ways.
-Psyve