on the complexities of a hillbilly

[Brownlie]

Ok, so I'm bored so I'll give this a go, and I think this is pretty good.

(hey guys. this is my first time doing this so help would be much appreciated!)


she boards the bus with a suitcase  -- Maybe capitalize here.
full of broken earrings,
torn stockings,
and kitchen knives.
she sits at the front,
does not cross her legs,
uses both armrests when she sits down.
she looks at the bus driver with eyes pilot light blue -- Maybe the syntax is a little awkward here.
under glasses she can’t afford,
slipped into the back pocket of her jeans in the Walgreens bathroom stall,  -- I like the line breaking here. If I'm reading right that is. 
along with something for those headaches she keeps getting
from the ugly brown tap water she drinks.
she is full of dust and cold wind,
her hair smells like wheat grass and exhaust.  
she has weaponized her accent. -- I like this, maybe capitalize "she."
she is from somewhere haunted,
somewhere with hotels built
on bulldozed graves.
on the soles of her shoes she has coal
and gasoline
and blood,
and it is not hers.
she has mountains under her fingernails,  -- I suppose somewhat "literally" if it's dirt under there.
she plays clawhammer banjo,
her teeth ache
from the number of times she has swallowed the word “stupid”.
she is tired of your shit.

I don't have much to say, but I think this is pretty cool. I suppose you could play around with the form if you feel inclined.