you start straight off in dialect for the first two lines and that's iit
the dialect isn't enough to set the tone of the area or era. it adds little or nothing to the piece. [the title does a lot better job at it] for me it would have been better if the dialect was threaded throughout the poem or left out completely.
"Don't interrupt me! Don't fool me"
could have been almost any older black woman from almost any area
Her New England accent pointed her words
punctuating the southern speech
while something along the lines above do a great job of placement, all this is my take on it, which doesn't mean it's so.
the dialect isn't enough to set the tone of the area or era. it adds little or nothing to the piece. [the title does a lot better job at it] for me it would have been better if the dialect was threaded throughout the poem or left out completely.
"Don't interrupt me! Don't fool me"
could have been almost any older black woman from almost any area
Her New England accent pointed her words
punctuating the southern speech
while something along the lines above do a great job of placement, all this is my take on it, which doesn't mean it's so.
(04-26-2015, 10:17 AM)MrTurnipHead Wrote: Thank you, Billy! I really appreciate the critique!
I've been seeing a lot of uses of arbitrary language pointed out in some of the comments in the Novice forum. I was wondering if you could give me some suggestions or rather elaborate on this?
