Tis a Grand Day to Die

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Ok, I have read the rules -- I read about the things I'm not suppose to do as a Novice -- I have voiced my opinion on the required number of poems - So now, I am ready to post my 1st poem (am I really?) At the least, I am game -- so here it is -- I write in what I call an Elementary 4 line style. I'm sure there is an official name for it, but then again, I am a Novice - so what do I know    -- Snarly--

Tis a Grand Day to Die

Gather round all my men
And set your sights on high
For the time has come to set about
Tis a grand day to die

Gather round, all that will
For the battle is oh so near
Stand steady all my friends
For there is nay a reason to fear

Lock and load and cinch up tight
And kiss the ladies bye
For the time has come among us
On this grand day to die

The demons that set our souls afire
And makes the weak ones cry
Stands before us in battle dress
Tis a grand day to die

No more noble a cause is there
Than to raise your saber high
And face death’s troubling ways
On this grand day to die

Fear not what tomorrow brings
Stare today straight in the eye
For it is now that must be dealt with
On this grand day to die !!!!!

Hi, Snarley, welcome. I think a steady meter would help, and you are not so far off that you couldn't achieve it. It's more the meaning, or lack of it that bothers me, particularly:

"No more noble a cause is there
Than to raise your saber high
And face death’s troubling ways
On this grand day to die"

The cause is to raise your saber high? I doubt it, but I never do find out what these people are willing to die for. Is it there and I'm missing it? For me, without that the poem doesn't matter.

I hope this helps, and hope you enjoy the site.