Blessing/Curse/Woman

[billy]

because it's about a common theme (for of women) it has to be original and in general it is, for me it lacks enough depth or imagery to hold the reader for long. what is distorted perfect? why is your existence catastrophe?  for me the refrain does much to much and because of this is pretty weak. the 1st line yes, and may another one or two throughout the poem. watch out for words or phrases that carry little or no weight. this seems to be a poem about "woman" in bold letters. i pointed out one such line there are others.

Because I am a woman,
I am expected to be an impossible version of myself. this line is long and also weak. which makes the opening statement weak; a suggestion would be to create some imagery that's strong and original and use it as a first line, then come in with the 'because i am woman' line.
Because I am a woman,
Every lens I look through is distorted to imperfection.
Because I am a woman,
I try to turn every ounce of hate for myself into love for you, is [try to] and [every ounce of] needed or does it make the line too wordy?
Until I am bone and skin.
Because I am a woman,
I was taught that this is the only way I would get love back.
Because I am a woman,
The only way to be happy is to call for an uprising,
To fight an unholy war until I return to the soil.
Because I am a woman,
My existence is catastrophe.
But because I am a woman,
I am strong enough to survive.