04-23-2015, 03:42 AM
(04-20-2015, 12:36 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote:I think you're right. I edited.(04-20-2015, 11:21 AM)71degrees Wrote: Tiny waves of skin,Hey 71. I get the picture nicely. At first read I thought you could crop quite a bit. Now I'm not as sure. I would still consider if you need the comma and possibly "but when". They might be implied by the form.
but when the heart pulses
reason sways
Paul