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[Erthona]

There's no doubt in my mind that there is a high percentage of people in the medical field who are martyrs and they love equally the sympathy as well as the adulation for risking their lives to save these worthless people (in their view as many are very superior and condescending) . On the other hand, this is not up to your usual work, compared to that this is sloppy writing.  

"There are no shadows"

This may have significance in your mind, but I think you fail to give it significance in the reader's mind. The sentence reads better without it.

"Just one. All by himself, he comes in, like I'm not important and he's not afraid or anything.

This is a terribly convoluted sentence, maybe:

"He comes in by himself as though I am unimportant and he is not afraid of me. "

I understand you are trying to pull off a dialect, but here it is not translating to the page. I grew up with people who would say things like, "He wasn't afraid or anything" so I understand what it means, still it just looks weird on the page.

Yes, the dialect seems to cut in and out intermittently. Or maybe it is just mixing dialects?

"he might take caution, even smile a canned smile,
not real or fake."

What is the purpose of tagging on "not real or fake"?  The reader will either know what is or is not a canned smile and saying "not real or fake." does little to clarify that.

This is the redeeming line of the whole:

"and have waited their whole lives for this not to happen"

I would include the end part, except it is written awkwardly.
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A final problem is the line truncation. I have no idea what your thinking was to break your lines as you did, but it was certainly not in the best interest of this prose-poem.  

Let me propose this for the ending:

"and have waited their whole lives for this not to happen,
but when it does, they are so excited
they just have to tell their friends."


Dale