04-18-2015, 06:08 AM
I am digging the tone of the new edit. I like the awkwardness, and I think it's spot on enough for the reader to know it was intentional...
As for the title...since the concept is vague, I don't mind a vague title...I might go with something like "ambition" or "progression" --perhaps, it's your baby though.
cheers!
bena the bombardier.
As for the title...since the concept is vague, I don't mind a vague title...I might go with something like "ambition" or "progression" --perhaps, it's your baby though.
cheers!
bena the bombardier.