04-15-2015, 08:31 PM
Thanks for the feedback! I'll be returning to edit this some time later this week.
Ellajam: I don't know if I should change the "Someday" to "Soon" -- it really was written with that sense of distance in mind. It's more a summation on the speaker's general sentiment, an expression of depression, basically, than a reaction to some immediate trauma. I'll wait for some more feedback on it to really consider going that immediate route. And as for your point on the title, I'll think of something. I agree with your sentiment: it's really more of a placeholder than anything else.
Ellajam: I don't know if I should change the "Someday" to "Soon" -- it really was written with that sense of distance in mind. It's more a summation on the speaker's general sentiment, an expression of depression, basically, than a reaction to some immediate trauma. I'll wait for some more feedback on it to really consider going that immediate route. And as for your point on the title, I'll think of something. I agree with your sentiment: it's really more of a placeholder than anything else.