Late Night Mistake

[RiverNotch]

Draw the curtains inward Wrong wording, unless you really mean pulling the curtains to the speaker.
power off the lights "Power off" sounds like a stupid complication of "turn off".
dim your way
wayward to the morning Somehow, these last two lines sound redundant and self-contradictory at the same time.

The sunrises This is one morning, right? So this should either be "the sun rises" or "the sunrise".
as my seratonin despises Serotonin, not Seratonin. The rhyme sounds forced. Serotonin is used for mood balance, so I don't think making it "despise" something makes sense.
the fuel of last night Continuing my issue with serotonin, since serotonin is reported as being low in characters with depression, and depressive people I believe tend to have lower sex drives and social behaviors -- ie, they'd want to be fueled throughout the night much less -- this really should be a thing supported by the said neurotransmitter.
I guess I'll try you This sounds contrived and incomplete. The mistake is "late night", not "this morning", and the sun is already rising, so it's definitely morning. Trying her at this point won't make late night's mistake a mistake to the speake

1...2...3...
C'mon
Come to me
One more
Promise The position, image, and actions of the subject are crucial for this stanza to be an effective portrait of the speaker's dialogue; without those, the audience won't really see in their minds what's happening here. So far, the speaker's thoughts have yet to be really developed (so his thoughts and feelings are definitely not the subject here) and his partner is yet to be described, so this whole stanza comes off as empty.

Please just stop
holding me to the crimes
of these eyelids that droop What crime could eyelids commit, in the context of a late night mistake?
cooped up like the hens This image is completely useless. Also, what are the things cooped up like hens? Your eyelids?
That already call out to 
the morning sun So the crime of the eyelids is opening themselves to the morning? What's the crime in that, again in the context of the late night mistake? The whole idea of this stanza needs a lot of clarification -- this whole thing plainly doesn't make sense.

Cock-a-doodle-do 
Fuck you With the fairly nonsensical thoughts the speaker has so far presented, the "fuck you" here only makes me sympathize with his partner more. Anyway, this ending doesn't really come up to anything -- it's not a good twist (late night mistake gives it away, and the set-up practically doesn't exist), it's not a good summation (but what is there to sum up, anyway?), and it doesn't really involve the reader.