04-08-2015, 08:05 PM
I agree with previous post, this is poignant on its own. The last two lines perhaps would have more impact if you left out the 'but'. So it would read "because I am a woman, I am strong enough to survive".
"Until I am bone and skin" makes me think of a woman feeling she has to be skinny to be beautiful, and then it turns ugly.
There were two lines that made me think, mainly because they felt out of context with the rest of the poem:
"The only way to be happy is to call for an uprising,
to fight an unholy war until I return to the soil"
These lines feel powerful and seem to switch the poem from an individual woman's struggle to find an identity in relation to the man in her life, to a more universal theme, like a cry from the heart.
There is much that is good in this. Thank you for the read of it. Grace :-)
"Until I am bone and skin" makes me think of a woman feeling she has to be skinny to be beautiful, and then it turns ugly.
There were two lines that made me think, mainly because they felt out of context with the rest of the poem:
"The only way to be happy is to call for an uprising,
to fight an unholy war until I return to the soil"
These lines feel powerful and seem to switch the poem from an individual woman's struggle to find an identity in relation to the man in her life, to a more universal theme, like a cry from the heart.
There is much that is good in this. Thank you for the read of it. Grace :-)