04-06-2015, 05:25 AM
I really like the mood that went into this poem. I don't usually like rhyme with hard subjects, but the sort of carefree sound of the rhyme and the subject matter work in your favor here to provide contrast. I do really like the subject matter, as well. The idea is not so abstract as to be hard to grasp, but I've certainly never read a poem quite like this one. I can't think of anything off the top of my head to say bad about this piece, except that it could benefit from stronger word choice. I especially like the last stanza, very moving! great job.
Sometimes I feel like writing poetry and sometimes I watch Netflix. No judging.

