Litmus

[71degrees]

L3--the line break at do is awkward, and my editing altered it.
Your poem, for all its brevity, has an appeal that many can relate to. It can easily be morphed into a senryu, should you desire.

Thanks, AHL…appreciate the look. Like the dash suggestion. Thanks for that. Trying to stay away from prose in the front half.

Reading it again, I sense the line break at do was intentional, to make not goose the reader. Well done on that.

Oh, it was intentional. Thanks for recognizing that. Not perfect and still open to suggestions, for sure.