Savannah

[christophx]

Savannah

Your sweet magnolia scent
mingles with the heat of my skin, Really strong start, simply a pleasure to read
wet hands clutching crushed petals. The phrase "wet hands" seems out of place to me here, although I understand what you're saying clearly.

I offer them to the sea I feel that if you reword this (remove "offer them") there is more room for an image that really allows you to express your ideas effectively
and lie down in the cool shallows.

Stretched out on Georgia sands
where clay meets saltwater,
I finally whisper your name. Really pleasing, gentle

I like it a lot. Inspiring to me,especially