Savannah

[cjchaffin]

Savannah

Your sweet magnolia scent
mingles with the heat of my skin,if you don't want to say "like wet hands" you may need a semi-colon after "skin"
wet hands clutching crushed petals. I'm unsure about heat radiating from wet hands

I offer them to the sea -slight ambiguity - are you offering your hands or the petals?
and lie down in the cool shallows. do you need "the"

Stretched out on Georgia sands
where clay meets saltwater,
I finally whisper your name. Beautiful

Hey CJ. This is lovely. My notes are hopefully a little food for thought, but really just little tweaks.
Thanks for the read,
Paul

 
thanks Paul. all valid points. i'm grateful for the read and critique.