a kiss

[nakedwonder]

Hi there. I enjoyed the overall feel and concept but (like others) feel it lacks depth or detail. I'm left wanting more (which is surely not a bad thing?). So, I would suggest simply carrying on where you left off, and giving the reader a little bit extra. The idea of words unspoken may also be a touch cliche, so could be wise to steer clear of this (only an opinion, however) ... overall, I enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing!


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