03-19-2015, 06:40 AM
Tonight,
Dad said that I could sleep out back under the stars.
I'm pretending that the night sky is my ceiling
and the full moon is a brand new light.
I agree with the other two critiques.
Nice idea. Nice clear idea. Unfortunately the writing is not as clear as the idea, but that is just a matter of time and work.
Best,
Dale
Dad said that I could sleep out back under the stars.
I'm pretending that the night sky is my ceiling
and the full moon is a brand new light.
I agree with the other two critiques.
Nice idea. Nice clear idea. Unfortunately the writing is not as clear as the idea, but that is just a matter of time and work.
Best,
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.