Osprey

Osprey

Leah S. Offline

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#10

03-17-2015, 01:20 AM

(03-05-2015, 12:05 PM)Deadrise Wrote: Rev 1

Osprey
sailing aloft
captured my heart.

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Blue, Osprey above
Green shoots, bronze haze, harvest moon
Grey, come back my Love

Your revision produced a very nice haiku, although I suggest a different verb than "captured." I thought of "snags."

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Osprey - by Deadrise - 03-05-2015, 12:05 PM

RE: Osprey - by Magpie - 03-06-2015, 12:15 AM

RE: Osprey - by Deadrise - 03-06-2015, 03:47 AM

RE: Osprey - by Magpie - 03-06-2015, 09:04 AM

RE: Osprey - by Erthona - 03-06-2015, 12:27 PM

RE: Osprey - by Deadrise - 03-08-2015, 12:45 AM

RE: Osprey - by toxic. - 03-08-2015, 03:54 AM

RE: Osprey - by Deadrise - 03-08-2015, 07:43 AM

RE: Osprey - by bena - 03-08-2015, 11:50 PM

RE: Osprey - by Leah S. - 03-17-2015, 01:20 AM

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