Rude Screen

[cjchaffin]

Rude Screen

before I knew you                   I was shocked                       no one is more beautiful
we walked past joshua's well   you thought me heartless      you drenched in sunlit
child growing inside                 but our kisses masked it        biting your lip

hello mrs magpie                     how's mr magpie                   three for a girl

i like the magpie reference and the symbolism/superstition attached to it; it works, sort of, but i find myself drawn more to that than the meat of the poem, because while the first two columns are promising, the third is lacking in both originality and content.

i have a question about the title: is this a play on words of the "rood screen" found in medieval churches? i can see how the physical and symbolic barrier of the rood screen might work here but i'm not sure is the intent...

i'm not sure of the significance of "joshua's well" (i know of Jacob's Well but not sure it's applicable) or if it really matters. 

i guess i have more questions than comments at this point. there seems to be a disconnect between the three columns, the title, and the magpies that i really think needs clarifying.