White Fielf Green Sheep

[tectak]

leanne - it's about vascular dementia

No. It's not. Believe me.It's not. It may well be a character with VDem writing a poem...but to what end? It is eminently more germane to write ABOUT someone who has suffered, for example, a severe stroke leaving them unable to communicate intelligibly than it is to write the malformed words or sentences which they may struggle with. Of course, it is quite reasonable to write the clear thoughts of someone dreadfully afflicted with a severe speech impediment...but it has  been done. In fact, I  believe an Oscar was forthcoming.
Thank goodness it is in mild.
This degree of obfuscation is as pointless as cockney rhyming slang in peacetime.
If you want to say something about something then say something about something clearly.
I cannot reconcile the good bits with the rest.
Best,
tectak

Please remember that this poetry lark has some standards, and though I hesitate to say it, much the same grammar rules as any piece of well written work...you know, punctuation and all that.