A Modest Proposal (Meter Discussion)

[fromcancertocapricorn]

A Modest Proposal


My Lady:

If I on penitent knee should bend
(My visage long with sorrow)
Would then my Lady condescend
To blow me in the ‘morrow?


Sir:

I find myself not so inclined                                
Toward your mooted notion;
I regret the morning will not find
My head bowed in devotion.


My Lady:

Fortunate he, who has no qualms
With solitary aberration;
But rather celebrates the charms    
Of autoerotic asphyxiation.

This poem is very funny, and I think it accomplishes its goal. A note on meter: other users have noted that to call oneself a poet you must be able to use meter aptly. This is simply not true. Many of the greatest poets never used meter, and honestly, while it is apparent you attempted meter, there's nothing wrong with changing it from the typical norm. Either you intentionally changed it to develop your unique rhythm, or you tried and failed at actual meter. That's my assessment. Carry on.