3-12-15 'Ku

[Tiger the Lion]

Hi Paul,

Feels like there should be a dash at the end of the second line or something to create a pause to make the last line more poignant. Also, I can't quite decide if 'this year' is needed. It could be read as being in the present tense ie whilst the maples are being tapped, in which case 'this year' seems redundant. But it could also be read as what is going to happen in the future ie 'we (will) tap the maples late', in which case 'this year' works a little better.

I like the image and what it implies. I also can't help looking at the word 'tap' and how many different meanings it can have, even as far as the British slang "to tap someone" meaning to ask someone for money/beg.

Thanks for the read,

Mark

Thanks Mark. You pretty much nailed every point I've been struggling with. I'm wondering if changing "tap" to "tapped" might solve some issues. I'm gonna work with this some more. I think the 'Ku is a little Canada-centric, but I can't fix that.
Thanks for the input,
Paul