03-12-2015, 06:14 AM
What I liked:
The sound of the poem was quite beautiful. Splitting the poem into three columns was unique and purposeful (not cliche).
What I didn't like:
While I felt the emotions you were trying to convey, the thoughts representing these emotions were mostly cheap and shallow. A line like, "no one is more beautiful" comes across as more of an insult than a compliment. As if you couldn't find the time of day to think of some words for her, so you just went with what everyone else says.
The sound of the poem was quite beautiful. Splitting the poem into three columns was unique and purposeful (not cliche).
What I didn't like:
While I felt the emotions you were trying to convey, the thoughts representing these emotions were mostly cheap and shallow. A line like, "no one is more beautiful" comes across as more of an insult than a compliment. As if you couldn't find the time of day to think of some words for her, so you just went with what everyone else says.