03-09-2015, 08:42 AM
I like the title and the fact that it plays a lead role in the piece. I appreciate the irony of the long first sentence. It works well, especially with "monotonous" to confirm.
I'm not sure by my read that "luxury" is the right word. Feels like it should be "hope" or "chance". - but that would mess with the syntax a little.
Also wish the word "drone" was in here somewhere. Haha
Good read,
Paul
I'm not sure by my read that "luxury" is the right word. Feels like it should be "hope" or "chance". - but that would mess with the syntax a little.
Also wish the word "drone" was in here somewhere. Haha
Good read,
Paul
