friend or foe

[hopefularahant]

Friend or foe
Don't you know
Love is weird
Typically feared
Take my call
IM giving you my all
You are the one
The one for me
Can't you see
What we have
Is so much fun
There's never enough
Enough of the sun
Times always on the run
Its always tough
Never understood why
Why its so rough
Whenever we say goodbye

Hey same name. I feel like your poem here is attempting to bring across far too many ideas in one short poem. And the title freind or foe seems to have no bearing on the subject matter of the poem. The topic or point the words are trying to get across changes every few lines. Also, your lines have nothing governing length, and the shortness of all of them kind of ruins the over all rythim, the breaks seem to have no meaning other than to accomodate the rhymes. Theres alot of fluff, though i feel you could cut some out and add some heightened language and poetic meter and verse, and youll have a good poem here!