The Snowman

[ellajam]

The guardian of the winter stood
with frock of frost and grafted wood.
A witches' wand he wields in hand.
The master of his winter land.

Notes/Original

Notes: I looked over the "new poet mistakes," and it looks like I have made a few XD.  But this one felt inspiring to me. I was thinking I could change "wand" to "want." My mom says this is a good poem and helped me to revise it from the original. I'll post it below for reference sake. I tried to be subtle in the imagery, making the reader ponder (but hopefully not too long) about what exactly I'm talking about, and then hopefully see a little majesty and personification in a child's creation.

My goal is to keep my poems short, simple and convey the message powerfully and memorably in as few words as possible.

Thanks in advance for any feedback!

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The guardian of the winter stood,
Frocked in frost and grafted wood.
With witches wand to wield in hand,
The master of his winter land.
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Hi and welcome. Nice little poem you have here, you really seem to have a hold on the meter. Line 3 is lovely. I have a bit of a problem with grafted wood, I'm not sure what to picture.

Good job with this, hope you enjoy the site.