"De amicitia"

[Leanne]

“De amicitia”ǂ

In the early morning
before eyes comprehend daylight,
while quiet rules the nether kingdom of dreams,  -- this line is cumbersome and probably unnecessary.  Taking it out does not damage the poem.  (My dreams are quite noisy and they always wake me up  )
a mind travels at synaptic speed -- minds always do.  Perhaps simply "I travel at synaptic speed".  
recalling,
deconstructing,
reimagining,
that which could never be, but… -- the ellipsis is distracting and unnecessary
may have been, if only I could remember. -- very tell-y line -- what about something like "that squats at the edge of my memory"?
During our youth, -- "during" is awkward -- why not just "in"?
when time was eternal,
the curtains would briefly part
offering unfocused glimpses
of that which we imagined in our play. -- this is another cumbersome line -- consider imagery instead of telling
Wearing glasses
coated in the shimmering sheen of unknown ignorance, -- unknown ignorance is tautological
we spoke in black and white,
and robed in creeds, in piety, in dogma, in…certainty. -- consider removing the ellipsis, breaking after dogma (maybe with a colon) and putting certainty by itself on the next line
Together we disintegrated in centrifugal rays
impelled forth as the remnants of an expiring star, -- I like these two lines a lot
colliding with the achievable and insurmountable, -- because these are opposites, you might try "colliding with both achievable and insurmountable"
concurrently luminous and lackluster,
drinking apocryphal water from the wells of truth -- nice!
as life
evolved into lives.
Constrained by reality and the humanity to which we still aspire, -- this is awkward, not doing justice to the lovely images that precede it.  Perhaps even "constrained by reality and a humanity not yet ours"?
echoing the words of Cicero,
“Esse quam videri.”*

*”To be, rather than to seem.”
ǂ On Friendship – A treatise by Cicero, Chapter 98

Hi K -- some really good metaphysics and philosophy blended together, which gets the brain ticking over, but it's not quite enough due to some of your relatively prosaic phrasing.  You would be well served by fewer words -- not simpler, mind you, because I do believe it's important to use the full extent of your vocabulary and choose precisely the right word to impart the idea you're reaching for.  It's largely a matter of injecting more imagery in a slightly less didactic manner.  It will come, though.  I enjoyed the read, thank you.