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02-26-2015, 03:24 AM
While you have rhyme, you don't really have a steady meter, so it comes off sounding like a children's story in that sense. There are lots of great articles out there on meter. And books if you're interested. I think "Rules for the Dance" by Mary Oliver is great - easy to understand and explained well. I'd suggest reworking this piece into something with some steady meter and then going from there!
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