02-24-2015, 05:28 AM
First let me say I thought this poem was fresh and fun. That title really jumps out to me.
I only had a few issues with the poem. The flow was a little off especially the 4th stanza.
Also in the 2nd stanza you say " I know she feels the same" but how can she be in love with you when she has the same response to everyone that says good morning? What makes you different then the other "thick frames"?
I only had a few issues with the poem. The flow was a little off especially the 4th stanza.
Also in the 2nd stanza you say " I know she feels the same" but how can she be in love with you when she has the same response to everyone that says good morning? What makes you different then the other "thick frames"?