A Twisted Proposal (Work in Progress)

[ellajam]

Sorry, I must have not been clear in my post, I wasn't asking for an explanation. I agree with you, if you have to explain the poem it has not successfully communicated.

I did read what you wrote about the four lines I critiqued. This line:

I ask you to take this in reside and know that it is now.

(this line is a little abstract, take this in reside is supposed to be me saying take this with a grain of salt. I am kinda confused with the that it is now part too now but i think i was going with that i still love this person in the present moment. At least its supposed to represent that.)

I have no idea how I am supposed to get Take it lightly from Take this in reside. As for the second part,t his has happened to me. If even I am not sure what I am saying how is the reader supposed to get even a clue?
Using words in ways unrelated to their actual definition rarely, if ever, works.

If you responded as to why some I s are lowercase I missed it.

My suggestion to you is to go over your explanation and decide whether or not each line has the capability of expressing that thought to the reader. In my case, the bits I understand are overpowered by what I can't make sense of.