02-12-2015, 05:05 PM
(02-11-2015, 02:45 AM)Erthona Wrote: Big fish - Small pondTruth-sayer....if that last line was in any language but native (my word) american I would be happier with the ultimate outcome of what is liable (destined/planned/arranged)to become known as the "Fish in a Barrel War".
Psychopaths gathering,
sniffing out brutality and blood.
Daesh is calling them home.
Fish in a barrel Pa, fish in a barrel! *
–Erthona
*As it would have been disruptive to the poem I did not write the last line in the dialect of the people who would use the phrase. Just for fun, a general approximation (as it is covering a large swath of rural folks below the Mason–Dixon line) would sound something like this:
"Fayesh an awh bay-row Paw"
"Fayesh" is pronounced as a diaeresis, similar to a diphthong.
The phrase signifies the straight-forward (seeing things in their simplest form, or seeing things for what it is) thinking of rural Southerners.
©2015
This is terse-verse of a high order...I think the thought is right, I hope no one asks me what I think. The exclamation mark at the end gives a weakness to the piece which is probably not intentional nor advantageous.
Best,
tectak

